Good Day I am attempting to see what it would be like to post each of our pieces separately so that we can respond to each other one at a time. If you send me your pieces electronically I will post them along with the individual histories of your pieces as I have done below mine.
stillness
the world's eyes opening
squinting
stretching before
my
eyes
the sacred yawn of morn
brings a solitude
of newness
hope, renewal and life
the woods
my magical forest
with twinkling eyes
winking
surrounding me
as we usher in the
day as
one
the world's eyes opening
squinting
stretching before
my
eyes
the sacred yawn of morn
brings a solitude
of newness
hope, renewal and life
the woods
my magical forest
with twinkling eyes
winking
surrounding me
as we usher in the
day as
one
The History of this Piece
This poem started a year ago when I was working in an 8th grade classroom modeling a writing in response to Ralph Fletchers book, Twilight Comes Twice. What started out as a quick write on the white board instantly became something that resonated with me in terms of trying to capture that feeling of those walks with my dog, Ruby in the woods. There are moments when we are walking, usually alone, that something completely wonderful, magical and mystical happens. It is almost as though I can feel the forest come to life. I posted this poem on my personal blog over a year ago and then again recently. I was thinking I would revise it and yet, each revision I tried was just not any better. And so I leave this poem, as is, for now...knowing that I will return to it yet again as I wonder...does the dog need to be a part of this? Is this enough? And each time I do go back I realize it is what I want...for now!!
Tomasen,
ReplyDeleteI like the initial opening--and the indents that precede each line. It kind of mirrors the gradual waking up process that comes with morning--stretching, yawning, spreading out, just as we do. It has a very hopeful tone that fits those beautiful summer mornings. :)
Tomasen,
ReplyDeleteI too have many poems which I would like to edit but should remain as they are. I think it is interesting that each time you revisit it you see it in a new light and yet keep it the same. This is a great poem as is. I found myself thinking of all the mornings I get up to capture with twinkling eyes the waking of the forest. Thank you for sharing.